Homework(my travel)
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thanks for sharing your today\'s thought. It\'s really good when we think about our past sometimes.
Sometimes we like to go back but we can\'t. I hope that you\'re happy every day in your life. ^^
By the way, we only have one hour difference. If it\'s 11 AM there, here in the Philippines is 10 AM.
~~May~~
People travel a lot as they live. When I was young, I often traveled alone. At that time, I also liked traveling so I used to go around a lot for the day. It was interesting to go far by train or bus.
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If I went there, my worries and fears about the new area are gone.
>> When I went there, my worries and fears about the new area were gone.
As soon as I opened my heart, I could meet new friends in strange places. In other words, I realized that people are all the same wherever they live. For example, one of my oldest friends is Korean Canadians.
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we had joy and met when we were young.
>> We met each other when we were young and we had fun together.
we still have the same memories because we have similar thoughts and minds.
>> We share each other memories because we have similar thoughts and minds.
Even if time have passed and we have lived far away, sometimes we think and cheer each other as an old friend.(like a wind of deep taste~!!)
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