Homework(Nov. 11)
학생이 쓴 원문
1) Describe my family members
I\'d like to talk about my grandmother who is 93 years old. She\'s very strong and healthy. She had lived together with my parents when I was born. Because my parents had jobs and were quite busy, I was raised by her. When I was 4, I remembered that we went for a walk everywhere within an hour-walking distance every morning and she bought me a pack of cookie or chocolate. I always appreciate her on having given me tons of affection. I hope she lives in a sound condition continuously.
2) What is the most important lesson my parents taught me?
The most important lesson my parents taught me was how it\'s essential for me to say hello when I meet someone, it doesn\'t matter those who I know or not. They said greeting to someone meant that I\'d like to know you or I wanted to be recognized. They also mentioned that the first step to make relationship with others was to say hello. So I still approach to somebody at first to shake hands or say hi.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
You\'ve done a great job in answering these questions from our IELTS book!
I hope that you will take note of some of the suggestions and grammar patterns to make your answers even more better.
Well done! Keep up the good work!
-T. Donna =)
I\'d like to talk about my grandmother who is 93 years old. She\'s very strong and healthy. She had lived together with my parents when I was born. Because my parents had jobs and were quite busy, I was raised by her.
>> Correct!
When I was 4, I remembered that we went for a walk everywhere within an hour-walking distance every morning and she bought me a pack of cookie or chocolate. I always appreciate her on having given me tons of affection. I hope she lives in a sound condition continuously.
>> Correct!
2) What is the most important lesson my parents taught me?
2) What is the most important lesson my parents taught me?
The most important lesson my parents taught me was how it\'s essential for me to say hello when I meet someone, it doesn\'t matter those who I know or not. They said greeting to someone meant that I\'d like to know you or I wanted to be recognized.
>> The most important lesson my parents taught me is how it\'s essential for me to say hello when I meet someone. It doesn\'t matter those who I know or not. If they greet someone it means that they\'d like to know you or they wanted to be recognized by you.
They also mentioned that the first step to make relationship with others was to say hello. So I still approach to somebody at first to shake hands or say hi.
>> They also said that the first step to make a relationship with others was to say hello. So I still approach somebody first to shake hands or say hi.
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