Homework(^o^)V
학생이 쓴 원문
Are video games containing violence appropriate for children? Explain your answer.
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I disagree.
If children plays video games that they can't play, they can be more violent.
I saw that the boy who is in the same grade was playing the game.
The game was about killing the people.
And he started to use the violence.
Have a good night.*^^*
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
That\'s fast! Kkkk~
I see that you also used the expression you just learned awhile ago. ^^
Good job!
Keep up the good work! ^^
I disagree.
>> CORRECT
If children plays video games that they can\'t play, they can be more violent.
>> If children play video games that they shouldn\'t play, they can be more violent.
I saw that the boy who is in the same grade was playing the game.
>> CORRECT
The game was about killing the people.
>> The game was about killing people.
And he started to use the violence.
>> Then he started to use violence.
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