Homework Oct 18th
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the young people in my country use free time playing computer game.
As Internet in Korea has developed very well, Korean is good at doing computer.
Young people like more the computer games than playing outdoors.
That\'s why I guess the young people in Korea use free time playing computer game.
강사 첨삭
Hello GeunYeong!
Thank you for doing your homework. :)
I understand that English could be really difficult.
But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.
You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^
Xoxo,
T. Christina ^^
Here are my corrections for you:
>> I think the young people in my country use their free time playing computer games.
As Internet in Korea has developed very well, Korean is good at doing computer.
As Internet in Korea has developed very well, Korean is good at doing computer.
>> The internet in Korea has developed very well and so Koreans are very knowledgeable about computers.
Young people like more the computer games than playing outdoors.
Young people like more the computer games than playing outdoors.
>> Young people likes computer games more than playing outdoors.
That\'s why I guess the young people in Korea use free time playing computer game.
That\'s why I guess the young people in Korea use free time playing computer game.
>> That\'s why, I guess, young people in Korea use their free time playing computer games.
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