homework of 4th, may

ESSAY: ANSWER IN NOT MORE THAN SEVEN [7] SENTENCES: Does your country have parades during holidays? Have you ever been to a parade? Korea has also various small parades by local government through a year. But the most famous one is WorldCup,which is not our own festival and also held in every 4 years. This phenomenon explains that our own festivals have lots of problems. For example, the host of the festivals does not promote enough. and the contents of the festival is not well-organized enough to enjoy without generation gap. For these reasons, I've never been to any parades after following my parents at seventeen.

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~Kelly^^
ESSAY: ANSWER IN NOT MORE THAN SEVEN [7] SENTENCES:
Does your country have parades during holidays? Have you ever been to a parade?
Korea has also various small parades by local government through a year.
>> In Korea, there are also various small parades sponsored by the local government every year.
But the most famous one is WorldCup,which is not our own festival and also held in every 4 years.
>> But the most famous one is the World Cup, which is not our own festival and is also held every 4 years.
This phenomenon explains that our own festivals have lots of problems.
>> Correct.
For example, the host of the festivals does not promote enough. and the contents of the festival is not well-organized enough to enjoy without generation gap.
>> For example, the host of the festivals does not promote the events very well and the entries are not well-organized so people from different generation can\'t enjoy the games.
For these reasons, I\'ve never been to any parades after following my parents at seventeen.
>> For these reasons, I\'ve never been to any of those parades after obeying my parents when I turned seventeen.