Homework on Friday

2013-01-21 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

Kelly, have a nice weekend!;-) 1)smog 2)emission 3)acid rain 4)to recycle 5)to destroy In my opinion, it would be better for both a driver & a passenger that the use of cell phones while driving a car should be prohibited. First of all, talking over the cell phone can distract driver's concentration while driving. When a driver faces on emergency situation, he cannot take a prompt action. Moreover, a driver can miss traffic signal much more time than usual. Driving a car is not availble for multi tasking because it is related in someone's safe & valuable life. So, cell phones & driving are not good combination. Not only a driver but also a passenger can be really in dangerous situation. Safe driving is important because it takes into consideration the lives of other people. There is no sense risking your life for calling cell phone while driving. Thus, I strongly agree that it does not act wise if someone is using a cell phone while driving because it is tied to our safety.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!

Congratulations for having a perfect score in your homework. Also, you\'ve got a strong opinion here. Yes, driving should not be associated with cellphone since it is really risky. Anyway, corrections are made below. Please do read and review them too. Happy weekend!

~T. Kelly

Kelly, have a nice weekend!;-)
1)smog

>>CORRECT
2)emission

>>CORRECT
3)acid rain
>>CORRECT

4)to recycle

>>CORRECT
5)to destroy
>>CORRECT
In my opinion, it would be better for both a driver & a passenger that the use of cell phones while driving a car should be prohibited.

>>In my opinion, the prohibition of cellphone use while driving is good for both the driver and the passenger/s.

First of all, talking over the cell phone can distract a driver\'s concentration while driving. 

>>CORRECT

When a driver faces an emergency situation, he cannot take a prompt action. 

>>CORRECT

Moreover, a driver can miss traffic signal much more time than usual.

>>Moreover, a driver could miss to abide the traffic signs often.

Driving a car is not available for multi tasking because it is related in someone\'s safe & valuable life. 

>>Driving a car doesn\'t go with multitasking because it is related to someone\'s safety.

So, cell phones & driving are not good combination.

>>CORRECT

Not only a driver but also a passenger can be really in dangerous situation.

>> Not only the driver but also the passengers could face a dangerous situation.

Safe driving is important because it takes into consideration the lives of other people.

>>CORRECT

There is no sense risking your life for calling cell phone while driving.

>>There is no sense to risk your life because of cellphone.

Thus, I strongly agree that it does not act wise if someone is using a cell phone while driving because it is tied to our safety.

>>Thus, I strongly agree that it is not a wise act to use a cell phone while driving since it is tied up to our safety.

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