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2018-03-09 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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"Cultivate optimism by committing yourself to a cause, a plan or a value system. You'll feel that you are growing in a meaningful direction which will help you rise above day-to-day setbacks.”~Robert Conroy Topic: Everyone should adopt vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree? I agree with adopting vegetarian diet. Adopting vegetarian diet is good for the health. Eating vegetable can intake lots of vitamin that is not included in the meat. That is better than taking a pill like supplement. If you need calrories or proteins to exercise you could have something made of beans.

강사 첨삭

Thank you again SPRING!

I made the necessary corrections below. Kindly review them.

See you!

~Teacher Shanee^^,

\"Cultivate optimism by committing yourself to a cause, a plan or a value system. You\'ll feel that you are growing in a meaningful direction which will help you rise above day-to-day setbacks.”~Robert Conroy

Topic: Everyone should adopt vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

I agree with adopting vegetarian diet.

>>> Correct!
Adopting vegetarian diet is good for the health.

>>> Correct!

Eating vegetable can intake lots of vitamin that is not included in the meat.

>>> Eating vegetables can help us get the vitamins or nutrients which we cannot get from meat.

That is better than taking a pill like supplement.

>>> Correct!

If you need calrories or proteins to exercise you could have something made of beans.

>>> If you need calories or protein to exercise, you can have something made of beans.

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