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학생이 쓴 원문
Is having a part-time job common in your country?
-> In my country, many university students do part-time job to earn some money. As they work while studying, they could find out how to spend and save money by themselves. For example, through the part-time job, I spend my own money by writing cashbook and I estimate how to control it. I save some money and so that I could travel other countries from my own money not to ask my parents to help.
Moreover, throught the part-time job, people can learn pre-social life before they get a job.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
I absolutely agree with your opinion! :)
Taking on a part-time job while pursuing a degree is a hard work, but the benefits are typically greater than the amount of a paycheck.
Students who work during their college careers may have better time-management skills. They earn money that can be used for fun or for tuition, while gaining experience in the workplace. :)
Have a restful night!
Catch you tomorrow!^^
~Teacher Alice
Is having a part-time job common in your country?-> In my country, many university students do part-time job to earn some money.
>> Correct!
As they work while studying, they could find out how to spend and save money by themselves.
>> Correct!
>> OR: As working students, they could learn how to spend and save money by themselves.
For example, through the part-time job, I spend my own money by writing cashbook and I estimate how to control it.
>> For example, through the part-time job, I get to spend my own money by recording on my cashbook and I estimate how to control my money.
I save some money and so that I could travel other countries from my own money not to ask my parents to help. >> I save some money so I could travel to other countries using own money not asking for my parents\' help.
Moreover, throught the part-time job, people can learn pre-social life before they get a job.
>> Moreover, through the part-time job, people can learn pre-social life before they get a job.
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