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2013-07-17 · 첨삭 강사 Kristel

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Is having a part-time job common in your country? -> In my country, many university students do part-time job to earn some money. As they work while studying, they could find out how to spend and save money by themselves. For example, through the part-time job, I spend my own money by writing cashbook and I estimate how to control it. I save some money and so that I could travel other countries from my own money not to ask my parents to help. Moreover, throught the part-time job, people can learn pre-social life before they get a job.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]! I absolutely agree with your opinion! :) Taking on a part-time job while pursuing a degree is a hard work, but the benefits are typically greater than the amount of a paycheck. Students who work during their college careers may have better time-management skills. They earn money that can be used for fun or for tuition, while gaining experience in the workplace. :) Have a restful night! Catch you tomorrow!^^ ~Teacher Alice  Is having a part-time job common in your country?-> In my country, many university students do part-time job to earn some money. >> Correct! As they work while studying, they could find out how to spend and save money by themselves. >> Correct! >> OR: As working students, they could learn how to spend and save money by themselves. For example, through the part-time job, I spend my own money by writing cashbook and I estimate how to control it. >> For example, through the part-time job, I get to spend my own money by recording on my cashbook and I estimate how to control my money. I save some money and so that I could travel other countries from my own money not to ask my parents to help. >> I save some money so I could travel to other countries using own money not asking for my parents\' help. Moreover, throught the part-time job, people can learn pre-social life before they get a job. >> Moreover, through the part-time job, people can learn pre-social life before they get a job.

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