homework :p

2013-07-22 · 첨삭 강사 Lexi

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What do you love about yourself the most? Explain why. -> As I get this question, I've thought about myself for a while. Thank you that I could remind myself ! I love my optimistic mind the most. I used to be upset whenever the situation that I don't want to happens and I was very selfish person. But whenever I was upset and furious about something, nothing was different, it was always same. It just goes. And time goes by, I learned that as the things happens even it's not my want, I have to accept it and think positively. I controlled my mind a lot to change. But now I am very optimistic !

강사 첨삭

Hi there ^-^ I\'m happy because you\'ve chosen to change for the better. I know at times a lot of things happen against our will. But most of the time, it happens for a good reason. Or if not, it give us lesson that we can apply later in life. Anyway, thank you for sharing this to me. Take care always :) Teacher Kristel   Here are my corrections: What do you love about yourself the most? Explain why.-> As I get this question, I\'ve thought about myself for a while. >> When I got this question, I\'ve thought about myself for a while. >> When I read this question, I\'ve thought about myself for a while.  Thank you that I could remind myself ! >>Correct :) >>OR: Thank you for letting me remind myself.I love my optimistic mind the most. >>I love my being optimistic. >>What I love the most is being optimistic.I used to be upset whenever the situation that I don\'t want to happens and I was very selfish person. >>I used to be upset when I\'m on situations that I don\'t want to happen because I\'m a selfish person.But whenever I was upset and furious about something, nothing was different, it was always same. >>Correct :)It just goes. >>Correct :) >>OR: Then, it just pass. And time goes by, I learned that as the things happens even it\'s not my want, I have to accept it and think positively. >>And as time goes by, I learned that things happen even if it\'s not what I want so I have to accept it and think positively.I controlled my mind a lot to change. >>To change, I learned to control my mind. >>To change, I learned to control myself.But now I am very optimistic ! >> Correct :)    

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