Homework-Reason to visit museums at new places.
학생이 쓴 원문
Composition writing: Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are two reason that many people visit museums when they travel to new places.
First, we can enjoy the culture of that new places. For example, if we travel to other country, we can experience and imagine how their culture was by seeing a variety of relics in the museum. People are able to learn other culture.
Second and the last reason is that the museums is in only that place or region. Every region or country have different museum. And we can visit that museum at the place and it is not possible to visit the same museum in other country. So it is not easy to visit the museum.
Museum is good place that we can learn and experience at that place when we travel to new places.
That is why many people want to visit museums travelling to new places.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름] ^^
Thank you for your essay. Be careful of whose point-of-view (POV) you are using though. Since you started the essay using a third person POV i.e. \"people\" then continue doing so by using prnouns such as \"they\", \"theirs\" and \"them\".
All good things,
==Teacher Charlie==
There are two reason that many people visit museums when they travel to new places.
>> I can think of two reasons why a lot of people visit museums when they travel to new places.
>> OR: In my opinion, a lot of people visit museums when they travel to new places because of two reasons.
First, we can enjoy the culture of that new places. For example, if we travel to other country, we can experience and imagine how their culture was by seeing a variety of relics in the museum. People are able to learn other culture.
>> First, people enjoy learning about the culture of a certain place. For example, when people travel to other countries, they can expericence and imagine how the local culture is by seeing a variety of artifacts in the museum.
Second and the last reason is that the museums is in only that place or region. Every region or country have different museum. And we can visit that museum at the place and it is not possible to visit the same museum in other country. So it is not easy to visit the museum.
>> Second is that each museum is local to that place only wherein every region or country has it\'s own unique museum. People can only visit that museum and it is not possible to see that same thing in another place.
Museum is good place that we can learn and experience at that place when we travel to new places.That is why many people want to visit museums travelling to new places.
>> Museums are good places to be able to learn and experience unique cultures and that is why people like to visit museums when traveling to new places.
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