homework (Sarah)
학생이 쓴 원문
I hate blood and surgery, so I want to become a doctor who makes medicines and develops treatments.Because I really like mixing liquids and powders with each other.And in the case of Covid-19, it could be possible to make a huge amount of money by developing a vaccine. and I want to be rich! just like everybody wants!
강사 첨삭
Hi Sarah!
You are really talented.
I hope you can keep up the good work.
Take note of the suggestions below.
Good job!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I hate blood and surgery, so I want to become a doctor who makes medicines and develops treatments.
>> Correct
Because I really like mixing liquids and powders with each other.
>> This is because I really like mixing liquids and powder together.
And in the case of Covid-19, it could be possible to make a huge amount of money by developing a vaccine.
>> In the case of Covid-19, it might be possible to make a huge amount of money by developing a vaccine.
and I want to be rich! just like everybody wants!
>> I want to be rich just like everybody does.
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