HOMEWORK: Some people believe smartphones clearly make life better in the modern world. Do you agree
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, smartphones certainly make life better in the modern world.
To begin with, it makes our daily lives more convenient and boost the quality of life by providing various applications. we can check when buses will come to the bus stop using apps like Kakao Map and Google Maps. There are also other applications and functions we can use, which are like booking accommodation, referring to the weather.
In addition, we can get help while studying. Personally, I search for lots of information in the Internet and watch online classes. In fact, many students prefer to utilize their smartphones to search for something or find some materials these days. Compared to laptop or desktop, we can reduce the weigh of a bag and easily access the Internet anywhere.
Not only for studies, we can get hobbies and relieve stress through smartphones. Many people enjoy playing games and watching videos or movies on YouTube and Netflix. This make our daily life more enjoyable.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Yeonsu. You demonstrate a good ability to express your ideas in writing. Your sentences are generally clear and organized, and you can explain your thoughts with enough detail. You also show a good understanding of basic grammar and sentence structure. Your strengths include your ability to write complete sentences and use a variety of vocabulary. You can stay on topic and support your ideas with examples. You\'re doing great! Keep it up! ~Teacher Jane ^^
In my opinion, smartphones certainly make life better in the modern world.
>> CORRECT
To begin with, it makes our daily lives more convenient and boost the quality of life by providing various applications.
>> To begin with, it makes our daily lives more convenient and boosts the quality of life by providing various applications.
we can check when buses will come to the bus stop using apps like Kakao Map and Google Maps.
>> We can check when buses will arrive at the bus stop using apps like Kakao Map and Google Maps.
There are also other applications and functions we can use, which are like booking accommodation, referring to the weather.
>> There are also other applications and functions we can use, like booking accommodations or checking the weather.
In addition, we can get help while studying.
>> CORRECT
Personally, I search for lots of information in the Internet and watch online classes.
>> Personally, I search for lots of information on the Internet and watch online classes.
In fact, many students prefer to utilize their smartphones to search for something or find some materials these days.
>> CORRECT
Compared to laptop or desktop, we can reduce the weigh of a bag and easily access the Internet anywhere.
>> Compared to a laptop or a desktop, we can reduce the weight of a bag and easily access the Internet anywhere.
Not only for studies, we can get hobbies and relieve stress through smartphones.
>> Not only for studies, but we can also get hobbies and relieve stress through smartphones.
Many people enjoy playing games and watching videos or movies on YouTube and Netflix.
>> CORRECT
This make our daily life more enjoyable.
>> This makes our daily life more enjoyable.
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