Homework, Teacher, Mrs. [Name]
학생이 쓴 원문
-Should women get plastic surgery to make themselves have a better self-image?- (^-^)
Yes. They should have a better self-image.
And they should try to improve their spiritual power.
Instinctive approach to the beauty make human emotionally empty.
Plastic surgery, esthetic method and even thought immoderate make-up are all some kind of obsession.
Sometimes they go to the psychologically pathologic condition, paranoia.
Human have nobility, honorability in our mental and spiritual world.
We should pursuit our specialty, honorable humanity.
That is the way to escape from obsession or paranoia.
Of course I agree with ordinary make-up and dressing in the range of courtesy.
Woman can be more beautiful in their behavior and way of thinking rather than appearance. ^^
강사 첨삭
Hi Mr. [이름]! ^ ^ Thank you for accomplishing your homework. I appreciate the effort! ^ ^
Thanks for your thoughts on this one. Very good! It\'s not all about appearance but what is inside the person that truly matters! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
Yes. They should have a better self-image.
>>Correct
And they should try to improve their spiritual power.
And they should try to improve their spiritual power.
>>But beauty is not all, they must also improve their spiritual self.
Instinctive approach to the beauty make human emotionally empty.
Instinctive approach to the beauty make human emotionally empty.
>>Instinctive approach to beauty makes human emotionally empty.
Plastic surgery, esthetic method and even thought immoderate make-up are all some kind of obsession.
Plastic surgery, esthetic method and even thought immoderate make-up are all some kind of obsession.
>>Correct (misspelled \"aesthetic\")
Sometimes they go to the psychologically pathologic condition, paranoia.
Sometimes they go to the psychologically pathologic condition, paranoia.
>>Sometimes they go to the psychologically pathological condition known as paranoia.
Human have nobility, honorability in our mental and spiritual world.
Human have nobility, honorability in our mental and spiritual world.
>>Humans should have nobility and great esteem to our mental and spiritual world.
We should pursuit our specialty, honorable humanity.
We should pursuit our specialty, honorable humanity.
>>Our pursuit must be to honor humanity.
That is the way to escape from obsession or paranoia.
That is the way to escape from obsession or paranoia.
>>Correct
Of course I agree with ordinary make-up and dressing in the range of courtesy.
Of course I agree with ordinary make-up and dressing in the range of courtesy.
>>Correct
Woman can be more beautiful in their behavior and way of thinking rather than appearance. ^^
Woman can be more beautiful in their behavior and way of thinking rather than appearance. ^^
>>A woman becomes more beautiful with their behavior and way of thinking rather than appearance. ^^
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