Homework-television's influence to communication

2016-07-25 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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Q.Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. I disagree the statement that television could destroyed communication among people around me. Actually we chat the popular soap opera or talk show when I meet my friends or co-worker in a company. Also, I can have something to discuss by watching the news with my family together. So I think it helps us have good relationship with people around me. Especially, there are so many useful program to learn on the television. It is very educational and gives us material to thought. By learning and sharing same good information each other, we can develop together. In conclusion, it has good influences in communication among friends and family.

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Hello [이름]! ^^   Thank you for answering the composition topic.   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==   I disagree the statement that television could destroyed communication among people around me.Actually we chat the popular soap opera or talk show when I meet my friends or co-worker in a company.Also, I can have something to discuss by watching the news with my family together. >> I disagree that television has destroyed among friends and family since when I watch TV, for example the news,  I have something to talk about with my family. My colleagues and I also talk about popular soap operas and talk shows that we just recently watched. So I think it helps us have good relationship with people around me.Especially, there are so many useful program to learn on the television.It is very educational and gives us material to thought. By learning and sharing same good information each other, we can develop together. >> This is why I think that watching television actually helps us build good relationships toward other people. Besides that, there are also plenty of useful and educational information on TV that gives food for thought that we can share with others. In conclusion, it has good influences in communication among friends and family. >> Thereby, watching television actually influenced good communication among family and friends.

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