Homework : The Most Important Person in My Life
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Who is the most important person in your life? Why is he/she the most important person in your life? What has he/she done for you? What can you do to mak
My best precious person in my life is Hyeongseok, my friend.
He has been my friend since we were twelve years old. and we have shared many experiences. we broke out after school class together, and we slept in each of our houses together.
Hyeongseok is the only person visited my troop during my military training. I didn\'t ask my relatives coming to my troop because it was far from my hometown. but he came with delicious bread and pizza. I was really touched by it.
He is now a student majoring Family Medicine in Daegu. a few days ago, He visited my house before taking national examination. I asked him what major would he take. He answered, He wanted to go to surgery. He wants to be like Lee Gukjong. most admired Korean surgeon. I hope that he will pass the exam and along the intern and resident period, He must become a great surgeon.
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Thank you for talking the time to answer your homework today. You did amazing with this one. Your sentences had complete thoughts and ideas. Keep up the good and hard work. I am very proud of you Jason! :)
>> The most precious person in my life is Hyeongseok, my friend.
He has been my friend since we were twelve years old. and we have shared many experiences.
He has been my friend since we were twelve years old. and we have shared many experiences.
>> We have been friends since we were twelve years old and we have shared many experiences with one another.
we broke out after school class together, and we slept in each of our houses together.
>> We broke out of school together and we slept at each other\'s houses together.
Hyeongseok is the only person visited my troop during my military training.
Hyeongseok is the only person visited my troop during my military training.
>> Hyeongseok is the only person who visited my troop during my military training.
I didn\'t ask my relatives coming to my troop because it was far from my hometown.
>> I didn\'t ask my relative to visit me at the barracks because it was far from where they live.
but he came with delicious bread and pizza.
>> Correct. OR He came with delicious bread and pizza.
I was really touched by it.
>> Correct.
He is now a student majoring Family Medicine in Daegu.
>> Correct.
a few days ago, He visited my house before taking national examination.
>> A few days ago, he visited my house before taking the national examination.
I asked him what major would he take. He answered, He wanted to go to surgery.
>> I asked him what major he would take, he answered that he wanted to be a surgeon.
He wants to be like Lee Gukjong. most admired Korean surgeon.
>> He wants to be like Lee Gukjong. one of the most admired surgeons in Korea.
I hope that he will pass the exam and along the intern and resident period, He must become a great surgeon.
>> I hope that he will pass his exam as well as his internship and resident period, I know that he will be a great surgeon.
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