Homework : What are some problems faced by your hometown?

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My hometown has many problems about various categories.

>> My hometown has different kind of problems.
In this essay, I will talk about these issues and my opinion.

>> In this essay, I will talk about these issues and I will also share my own opinion.
Firstly, the price of house in my town has increased dramatic for a long time.

>> Firstly, the prices of houses in my town has increased dramatically over time.
It\'s a serious problem for most couples who already got married or will marry soon to find their accommodation.

>> It\'s a serious problem for most couples who just got married or will marry soon and are trying to find accommodation.
They should borrow money inevitable from banks and It might engender other critical issues.

>> It is inevitable for them to borrow money from banks and this might raise other critical issues.
Therefore, the government must establish the policy to remain the suitable price of house.

>> Therefore, the government must establish a policy to maintain reasonable prices of houses.
Secondly, the quality of environment near my town is becoming worse.

>> Secondly, the condition of the environment near my town is becoming worse.
For example, people lived in Seoul can\'t see and feel fresh air because of the pollution of the air.

>> For example, people from Seoul can\'t enjoy fresh air because of pollution.
There are many reasons why cause these pollution.

>> There are different causes of pollution.
Some reasons come from other countries and others are made by nation issues.

>> Pollution is caused both by national and foreign issues.
So the Korea government, companies and citizens should try to improve the quality of environment.

>> So the government, private companies and citizens must all work together to improve the conditions of the environment.
Although my town has other problems, I think that these are main issues that must be fixed.

>> Although my town has other problems, I think that these are the main issues that must be fixed.