Homework : What are some things people can do to eliminate discrimination and prejudice?

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There are several kinds of discrimination in the world.

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In this essay, I will explain a few issues and indicate my opinion.

>> In this essay, I will explain a few issues and express my opinion.
First of all, serious discrimination is the racism.

>> First of all, a serious kind of discrimination is racism.
 Although some peple usually respect all people without any prejudice, other people tend to inpolitely deal with foreigners with different races.

>>  Although some people usually respect others without any prejudice, other people tend to be disrespectful to those who belong to a different race.
 For example, some visitors might feel that waiters don\'t try to come to their tables for orders even if they call a few times.

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Secondly, discrimination about sex should be eliminated.

>> Secondly, gender discrimination should be eliminated.
Some people act difference by sex of communicator.

>> Some people act depending on the sex of the person they are communicating with.
 They tend to be more polite to man than woman.

>>  They tend to be more polite to men than women.
 In addition, some people think people should work difference by gender, even though such works don\'t relate to either man or woman.

>>  In addition, some think that people should work according to their gender even though there should be any relation to sex at all.
In conclusion, we should fix these problems about racism and gender.

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These efforts will help our society develop definitely.

>> These efforts will help our society develop.