Homework : What are the situations that make you angry?

2018-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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It is not usual for me to make angry. However, if I have to choose the situation, I will talk about this situation and my reaction. First of all, sometimes I get angry if someone forces me to do that doesn't make sense. For example, a few years ago, my boss lets me prepare a report about a briefing for another briefing. I thought that the report was not efficient and I explained this situation to the boss. However, It’s not accepted and I was dissatisfied while I wrote the report. Secondly, I will talk about my reaction in this situation. When I am in that events, I usually express my opinions on unpair requirements to orderers. If I can’t agree with their responses or they reject my opinions, I might accept this situation and I do what they ask me, even though I have complaints. Therefore, I hope that our society or culture will be base on real communication that can respect each other. To solve this problem, many kinds of people should make efforts and these are never stopped.

강사 첨삭

Hi Allen!

You\'re on a roll!

Peruse the suggestions below.

I\'ll see you in class.^^

~~ Teacher Sharon

It is not usual for me to make angry.

>> It is not usual for me to be angry.
 However, if I have to choose the situation, I will talk about this situation and my reaction.

>>  However, if I have to choose a situation, I will talk about this situation and my reaction to it.
First of all, sometimes I get angry if someone forces me to do that doesn\'t make sense.

>>  First of all, sometimes I get angry if someone forces me to do something that doesn\'t make sense.
For example, a few years ago, my boss lets me prepare a report about a briefing for another briefing.

>> For example, a few years ago, my boss asked me to prepare a report about a briefing for another briefing. 

I thought that the report was not efficient and I explained this situation to the boss.

>> Correct
However, It’s not accepted and I was dissatisfied while I wrote the report.

>>  However, it was not accepted and I was dissatisfied while I wrote the report.
Secondly, I will talk about my reaction in this situation.

>> Correct
When I am in that events, I usually express my opinions on unpair requirements to orderers.

>> When I am in that situation, I usually express my opinions regarding the matter.
If I can’t agree with their responses or they reject my opinions, I might accept this situation and I do what they ask me, even though I have complaints.
>> If I can’t agree with their responses or they reject my opinions, I might accept this situation and I do what they ask of me even though I have complaints. 
Therefore, I hope that our society or culture will be base on real communication that can respect each other.

>> Therefore, I hope that our society or culture will be based on real communication that can respect each other.
To solve this problem, many kinds of people should make efforts and these are never stopped.

>> To solve this problem, many kinds of people should make an effort and such efforts must be maintained.

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