Homework : What do you feel about smoking in public places?

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There are different opinions about smoking in public places.

>> Correct
The governments should control places that people can smoke

>> The government should limit the places where people can smoke.

and people who used to smoke have to adjust their place to avoid others\' uncomfortableness.

>> Also, people who are used to smoking must limit this activity to certain places to avoid causing discomfort to other people.
In this essay, I will talk about my opinions.

>> Correct
It causes weakness of health to both smokers and non-smokers.

>> Smoking causes weakness of health to both smokers and non-smokers.
According to many researches, they have proved how much smoking negatively affect to their health in various categories.

>> According to research, it has been proven that smoking negatively affects people\'s health in various ways.
Furthermore, it also has disadvantages so far to non-smokers nearby.

>> Furthermore, it also has disadvantages for non-smokers in the vicinity.
These are reasons why they should control their places.

>> There are many considerations in choosing the area where people could smoke.
For these reasons, We have to concern about how to stop smoking.

>> For these reasons, we have to be concerned and stop smoking.
Even though individuals try to stop it, governments should establish policy to decrease the number of smokers.

>> Even though individuals try to stop it, governments should establish a policy to decrease the number of smokers.
For example, they can limit places that smoking is possible.

>> For example, they can limit places where smoking is allowed.
Many countries already employ this role and they have succeeded to drop the number.

>> Many countries already implement this rule and they have succeeded in dropping the number of smokers.
In conclusion, smoking places should be controlled by oneself and governments.

>> In conclusion, smoking areas should be controlled by citizens and the government.