(Homework)What factors influence a career choic
학생이 쓴 원문
It has two main reasons about this.
First of all, when i admitted to the university, i chose civil engineering of core course.
The subjects was unfamiliar with me. but i did on myself to study for graduation.
Thanks to efforts, I was increasingly familiar with civil engineering and then i could take the public employee test.
Finally, i passed exam without fail.
Second, my father was public employee too. so i was influenced by my father\'s job.
In Korea, public employee is most stable job such as welfare, enough free time, but not incomes.
In the end of the that I always proud of my job and feel happy. Thank you
강사 첨삭
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CONTENT:
1. It has two main reasons about this.
-- There are two main reasons for this.
2. First of all, when i admitted to the university, i chose civil engineering of core course.
-- First of all, when I was admitted to the university, I chose civil engineering as my major course.
3. The subjects was unfamiliar with me. but i did on myself to study for graduation.
-- The subjects were unfamiliar to me, but I studied hard by myself to graduate.
4. Thanks to efforts, I was increasingly familiar with civil engineering and then i could take the public employee test.
-- Thanks to my efforts, I became increasingly familiar with civil engineering and then I was able to take the public employee test.
5. Finally, i passed exam without fail.
-- Finally, I passed the exam successfully.
6. Second, my father was public employee too. so i was influenced by my father\'s job.
-- Second, my father was a public employee too, so I was influenced by his job.
7. In Korea, public employee is most stable job such as welfare, enough free time, but not incomes.
-- In Korea, being a public employee is one of the most stable jobs, with welfare benefits and enough free time, but not high income.
8. In the end of the that I always proud of my job and feel happy.
-- In the end, I am always proud of my job and feel happy.
9. Thank you
-- CORRECT.
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