(Homework)What is the best thing about your birthplace?
학생이 쓴 원문
i was born in Gwangju, Korea.
my country is the most famous for democracy.
in 1980, the military has came in Gwangju, and they killed many citizens of Gwnagju
but citizens of Gwnaju consistently fighted with military. after all, they have achieved their\'s freedom and democracy
i think that there is no Gwangju, there is no democracy. so, i am so proud of Gwangju
Thank you~
강사 첨삭
[이름],
Thank you for sharing! Please review the corrections. Remember that clear sentence structure and correct word choice make your ideas easier to follow.
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
i was born in Gwangju, Korea.
-- I was born in Gwangju, Korea.
my country is the most famous for democracy.
-- My country is most famous for democracy.
in 1980, the military has came in Gwangju, and they killed many citizens of Gwnagju
-- In 1980, the military came to Gwangju and killed many citizens.
but citizens of Gwnaju consistently fighted with military. after all, they have achieved their\'s freedom and democracy
-- But the citizens of Gwangju consistently fought against the military. After all, they achieved their freedom and democracy.
i think that there is no Gwangju, there is no democracy. so, i am so proud of Gwangju
-- I think that without Gwangju, there would be no democracy. So, I am very proud of Gwangju.
Thank you~
-- CORRECT.
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