Homework : What’s the best place you’ve ever visited?

2018-01-05 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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I can remember the great places that I've ever been. To visit these places positively influences my mind. So I will talk about that and explain about my good memory. The greatest place for me is the Boracay, one of islands in Philippines. Two years ago, I went to the island with my family. We were surprised how beautiful it is. Especially, There were several spots that we loved. First attraction is the White beach, one of the popular beaches in Boracay. I was significantly impressed when I saw the sunset in the pub where were located on the beach. The second greatest place is the Thailand. The place is the my first international place and I had many impressive experiences. There are strange appeal that I can't explain exactly why I visited ten times. The Thailand has great night markets and unbelievable natures. Honestly, I also love to drink in the pub on the Kaosan road. When I get there, I feel that my tension is rising and I really like to listen to live music in there.

강사 첨삭

Hi Allen!

This is the end of the week.

Thank you for always working hard.

Let\'s make the last class of the week great!

See you later!

~~ Teacher Sharon

I can remember the great places that I\'ve ever been.

>> I can remember the great places that I\'ve been to.
To visit these places positively influences my mind.

>> Correct
So I will talk about that and explain about my good memory.

>> I will talk about that and share some good memories.
The greatest place for me is the Boracay, one of islands in Philippines.

>> The greatest place for me is Boracay, one of the islands in the Philippines.
Two years ago, I went to the island with my family.

>> Correct
We were surprised how beautiful it is.

>> We were surprised how beautiful it was.
Especially, There were several spots that we loved.

>> We especially loved several spots.
First attraction is the White beach, one of the popular beaches in Boracay.

>> The first attraction is the White beach, one of the popular beaches in Boracay.
I was significantly impressed when I saw the sunset in the pub where were located on the beach.

>> I was significantly impressed when I saw the sunset in the pub which was located on the beach.
The second greatest place is the Thailand.

>> The second greatest place is Thailand.
The place is the my first international place and I had many impressive experiences.

>> This place was the first place I have visited abroad and I had many impressive experiences.
 There are strange appeal that I can\'t explain exactly why I visited ten times.
>> The place has a strange appeal to me and that\'s why I\'ve visited this country ten times already.
The Thailand has great night markets and unbelievable natures.

>> Thailand has great night markets and unbelievable natural attraction.
Honestly, I also love to drink in the pub on the Kaosan road.

>> Honestly, I also love to drink in a pub on Kaosan road.
When I get there, I feel that my tension is rising and I really like to listen to live music in there.

>> When I go there, I feel that my spirits are rising and I really like to listen to live music there.

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