HOMEWORK: What would make you stay somewhere?
학생이 쓴 원문
I\'d like to stay somewhere where I can feel both peace and vibrancy. I have lived in several cities in Korea due to my parents\' work. I once lived in Ulsan and Gumi, known as major industrial cities, and then moved to Daejeon for university. Nowadays, I am living in Dongtan, near Seoul mostly to prepare for studying abroad in the future. I think this background helped me develop a sensitivity to the atmosphere of cities. In addition, I traveled to various cities abroad before and felt that I\'d like to live in calm, culturally diverse cities that are not too isolated. For example, in Korea, I\'d like to live in the Haenggung-dong area of Suwon or on Jeju Island, both of which has beautiful scenery and cultural facilities.
강사 첨삭
[이름],
Well done! You explained your preferences well and gave clear examples of places you’d like to stay. Thank you! I searched for the places you mentioned, and they are splendid!
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
I’d like to stay somewhere where I can feel both peace and vibrancy.
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I have lived in several cities in Korea due to my parents\' work.
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I once lived in Ulsan and Gumi, known as major industrial cities, and then moved to Daejeon for university.
~ CORRECT.
Nowadays, I am living in Dongtan, near Seoul mostly to prepare for studying abroad in the future.
~ Nowadays, I am living in Dongtan, near Seoul, mostly to prepare for studying abroad in the future.
I think this background helped me develop a sensitivity to the atmosphere of cities.
~ CORRECT.
In addition, I traveled to various cities abroad before and felt that I\'d like to live in calm, culturally diverse cities that are not too isolated.
~ CORRECT.
For example, in Korea, I\'d like to live in the Haenggung-dong area of Suwon or on Jeju Island, both of which has beautiful scenery and cultural facilities.
~ For example, in Korea, I’d like to live in the Haenggung-dong area of Suwon or on Jeju Island, both of which have beautiful scenery and cultural facilities.
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