Homework(winter festival)

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Your sentences are simple and understandable. Keep it up! ^^

Thanks for sharing your thoughts about winter. It seems that it\'s your favorite season.

How I wish I could experience snow. ^^

~~May~~

In winter, the scenery that comes to mind is unfolding before us.

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Snow on the trees, a bright full moon floating on a calm night, and frozen river waters are beautiful scenery.

>> Snow on the trees, a bright full moon floating on a calm night, and frozen river are beautiful sceneries.

So Gangwon-do, one of the cold places in Korea, has such beauty and is famous for its winter festivals.

If you go there, you can have fun activities in the beautiful winter scenery.
 For example, you can see an exhibition of snow sculptures and come into contact to various experience and performance programs.

Among them, my favorite things are ice sledding or making snowmen with my children. I also like ice fishing which is very popular these days.

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Because I saw so many people ice fishing on TV on the frozen river.

>> I saw so many people ice fishing on TV on the frozen river.

So when winter comes, my heart always goes to the winter of Gangwon-do. Although it is cold outside,it can be also a precious memory of life when you are active.

So,if you try and make precious times more valuable, winter is also a warm season for your mind. How about taking part in winter activities?

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