Homework with Korean History.

Dear [이름],

A terrific Thursday to you! ^.^

          I am really glad that you did your homework. Furthermore, you shared some information about the History of your country. Thanks a lot! ^^

          However, I think you need to double-check your writing. Do you know why? It is because you need to check more your spelling and vocabulary usage. You made great compositions, but you need to be more careful when you spell words and use them in your sentences. You have to read your work again to avoid mistakes next time, especially in spelling.

          Anyway, don\'t worry! ^^ You did great in doing your writings. Congratulations! ^^,

          That\'s all for now! ^^. See you tomorrow! ^.^

... Teacher [이름]a ... ^.~

I think that it is always better to have a teacher.

>> CORRECT!

There are two teasons.

>> There are two reasons.

First reason is if studnts learn ourselves, there are not many chances that are improving the sociability.

>> The first reason is if students learn by themselves, there are not many chances for social improvement.

Second reason is if studnts learn ourselves, their grade will decline.

>> The second reason is if the student learn by themselves, their grades will decline. 

First reason is if studnts learn ourselves, there are not many chances that are improving the sociability.

>> If student learn by themselves, there are not many chances for social improvement.

If students learn ourselves, they won\'t have enough chances to meet.

>> If this happens, they won\'t have enough chances to meet other people.

Thenthose students will difficult to face other people.

>> Then, those students will have some difficulties facing other people.

So,there are not many chances that are improving the sociability.

>> Therefore, there are not many chances for them to improve their social lives.

Second reason is if studnts learn ourselves, their grade will decline because if studnts learn ourselves, they can\'t ask to teacher even the problem they can\'t solve.

>> The second reason is if the student learn by themselves, their grades will decline, because they can\'t ask any teachers about the problems they can\'t solve.

Korean History #1

After Gojoseon perish, Dong-myung king found a Booyu.

>> After Gojoseon perish, King Dong-myeong found Booyu.

>> OR: After the fall of Gojoseon, King Dong-myeong found Booyu.

It was in Manchuria.

>> It was in Manchuria.

They used iron well.

>> They used iron there well.

>> OR: People from that place used iron well.

The land of Booyu was very fertile.

>> CORRECT!

I that days, three Han (Mahan, Jinhan, and Byunhan) found countries.

>> On those days, three Hans, which are Mahan, Jinhan and Byeonhan, were found.

>> OR: On those days, three kingdoms, which are Mahan, Jinhan and Byeonhan, were found.

Those were the South part of Korea.

>> Those were located in the southern part of Korea.