Homework with Korean History.
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
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A person you know is planning to move to your town or city.
What do you think this person would like and dislike about living
in your town or city? Why?
I think that If \'a person you know\' is my friend, I would like about living in my city.
>> I think that if \'a person I know\' is my friend, I would like him or her to live in my city.
There are two reasons.
>> CORRECT!
The first reason is we can greet each other every day.
>> CORRECT!
The second reason is we can play often.
>> CORRECT!
The first reason is we can greet each other every day.
>> CORRECT!
When we greet each other every day, we can keep our friendly relations.
>> When we greet each other every day, we can keep our friendship.
>> OR: When we greet each other every day, we can make our friendship stronger.
Also, we can ask after each other.
>> In addition, we can ask each other.
We can become intimate.
>> CORRECT!
The second reason is we can play often.
>> CORRECT!
I have three best friends.
>> CORRECT!
two of them are live in other cities.
>> Two of them in other cities.
So we can\'t play easliy.
>> Therefore, we can\'t play easily and often.
I usually play by mayself.
>> I usually play with myself.
When we live nearly, we can meet.
>> When we live near each other, we can meet.
So we can play more easily.
>> Therefore, we can play more easily and often.
Korean History #4
660 A.D, Sinla combine with Dang and occupied the Baekje.
>> In 660 A.D., Silla combined with Dand and occupies Baekje.
676, they occupied Goguryeo and Sinla unification the penisula.
>> In 676 A.D., they occupied Goguryeo, and Silla unified the peninsula.
Some posterity of Goguryeo built the Balhae.
>> CORRECT!
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