Homework with Korean History.

2017-02-28 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? Why? I think that If 'a person you know' is my friend, I would like about living in my city. There are two reasons. The first reason is we can greet each other every day. The second reason is we can play often. The first reason is we can greet each other every day. When we greet each other every day, we can keep our friendly relations. Also, we can ask after each other. We can become intimate. The second reason is we can play often. I have three best friends. two of them are live in other cities. So we can't play easliy. I usually play by mayself. When we live nearly, we can meet. So we can play more easily. Korean History #4 660 A.D, Sinla combine with Dang and occupied the Baekje. 676, they occupied Goguryeo and Sinla unification the penisula. Some posterity of Goguryeo built the Balhae.

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A person you know is planning to move to your town or city.
What do you think this person would like and dislike about living
in your town or city? Why?


I think that If \'a person you know\' is my friend, I would like about living in my city.

>> I think that if \'a person I know\' is my friend, I would like him or her to live in my city.

There are two reasons.

>> CORRECT!

The first reason is we can greet each other every day.

>> CORRECT!

The second reason is we can play often.

>> CORRECT!

The first reason is we can greet each other every day.

>> CORRECT!

When we greet each other every day, we can keep our friendly relations.

>> When we greet each other every day, we can keep our friendship.

>> OR: When we greet each other every day, we can make our friendship stronger.

Also, we can ask after each other.

>> In addition, we can ask each other.

We can become intimate.

>> CORRECT!

The second reason is we can play often.

>> CORRECT!

I have three best friends.

>> CORRECT!

two of them are live in other cities.

>> Two of them in other cities.

So we can\'t play easliy.

>> Therefore, we can\'t play easily and often.

I usually play by mayself.

>> I usually play with myself.

When we live nearly, we can meet.

>> When we live near each other, we can meet.

So we can play more easily.

>> Therefore, we can play more easily and often.



Korean History #4


660 A.D, Sinla combine with Dang and occupied the Baekje.

>> In 660 A.D., Silla combined with Dand and occupies Baekje.

676, they occupied Goguryeo and Sinla unification the penisula.

>> In 676 A.D., they occupied Goguryeo, and Silla unified the peninsula.

Some posterity of Goguryeo built the Balhae.

>> CORRECT!

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