Homework with Korean History
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Dear [이름],
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Firstly, I would like to thank you for doing your homework.
Secondly, I would like to congratulate you for making a good composition, but don\'t forget to check the suggestions below.
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... Teacher [이름]a ... ^.~
I support this plan.
>> CORRECT!
There are three reasons.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: I have three reasons.
The first reason is I can go to movie theater to watch some movies easily.
>> The first reason is I can go to the movie theater to watch some movies easily.
The second reason is local economy will be improve.
>> The second reason is the local economy will be improved.
>> OR: The second reason is the local economy will improve.
The last reason is traffic and transportaions will be improve.
>> The last reason is the traffic and transportation will be improved.
>> OR: The last reason is the traffic and transportation will improve.
The first reason is I can go to movie theater to watch some movies easily.
>> The first reason is I can go to the movie theater to watch some movies easily.
Naturaly, residents are easy to go to movie theater.
>> Naturally, residents can easily go to the movie theater.
So we can watch movie easily.
>> Therefore, we can all watch movies easily.
THe second reason is local economy will be improve.
>> The second reason is the local economy will be improved.
When theater is bulit, many people will vist.
>> When the theater is built, many people will visit it.
They will buy goods and foods.
>> CORRECT!
Traders will make lots of profit.
>> CORRECT!
The last reason is traffic and transportaions will be improve.
>> The last reason is the traffic and transportation will be improved.
When theater is bulit, many people will vist.
>> When the theater is built, many people will visit it.
>> OR: When the theater is built, many people will go there.
Then, the traffic jam will happen and city government will make more roads and street.
>> Then, the traffic jam will happen, and the city government will make more roads and streets.
Korean History #5
Balhae was destroyed by \'Gulan\' and Wang Gun destroyed Sinla and built Goyreo.
>> Balhae was destroyed by Gulan, and Wang Geon destroyed Silla and Goryeo was built.
Wang Gun was accepting person.
>> Wang Geon was an accepting person.
So he accept the displaced people from Balhae.
>> Therefore, he accepted the displayed people from Balhae.
His son Gwang-jong develop Goyreo.
>> His son Gwang-Jong developed Goryeo.
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