Homework( Women usually live longer than med do, why do you think so? )
학생이 쓴 원문
As everyone know, most of wowmen live longer than men do. I can guess why wowmen live longer.
First reason is smoking. Men smoke more than wowmen do. Smoking makes human have a cancer, many diseases, etc. I think many man have died because of smoking.
Second is stress of company. From my experience, my father is stressed because of many boring works, and drinking alchoal at mess in his company. I think it makes man's life shorther. These days, Wowmen work for company, but number of man is much than number of wowmen so far.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
Thank you for doing your homework.
Yes, I think so, too.
Women usually live longer than men.
Sometimes it also depends.
So, have a good night!
T. Barbara**,
As everyone know, most of wowmen live longer than men do.
>> As everyone knows, most of women live longer than men do.
I can guess why wowmen live longer.
>> I can guess why women live longer.First reason is smoking.
>> First, it\'s because of smoking.
Men smoke more than wowmen do.
>> men smoke more than women do.
Smoking makes human have a cancer, many diseases, etc.
>> Smoking makes human have cancer many diseases, etc.
I think many man have died because of smoking.
>> I think many men have died because of smoking. Second is stress of company.
>> Second, it\'s because of the stress from the workplace.
From my experience, my father is stressed because of many boring works, and drinking alchoal at mess in his company.
>> Based from my experience, my father was stressed because of many boring works
I think it makes man\'s life shorther.
>> I think it makes a man\'s life shorter.
These days, Wowmen work for company, but number of man is much than number of wowmen so far.
>> These days, women work in the company but the number of men is more than the number of women so far.
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