HOMEWORK: Would you consider living in a retirement home when you\'re older? Why or why not?
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Would you consider living in a retirement home when you\'re older? Why or why not?
I don\'t know exactly what the retirement home is, but just based on my first impression of it, I don\'t prefer living in a retirement home despite when I get very older.
As long as I\'m able to do something in the future, I want to be a member of society. Because I want to do what I can for someone, and also it makes me to feel that I\'m living.
As I was writing, I came to talk about retirement rather than answers as to whether or not I prefer to live in a retirement home.
Please let me know next time what a retirement home is. Thanks.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Homer. :)
As long as I\'m able to do something in the future, I want to be a member of society.
As I was writing, I came to talk about retirement rather than answers as to whether or not I prefer to live in a retirement home.
Please let me know next time what a retirement home is. Thanks.
A retirement home is a place where the elderly stay when they are quite too old to take care of themselves.
Usually, in Korea, the children of elderly people send their parents to retirement homes so that the nurses there can take better care of them.
Thank you for your time and effort in making a composition. ^^
~t. Ally
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I don\'t know exactly what the retirement home is, but just based on my first impression of it, I don\'t prefer living in a retirement home despite when I get very older.
>> I don\'t know what a retirement home is, exactly, but based on my first impression of it, I don\'t prefer living in a retirement home when I become older.
As long as I\'m able to do something in the future, I want to be a member of society.
>> CORRECT!
Because I want to do what I can for someone, and also it makes me to feel that I\'m living.
>> Because I want to do what I can for others, and it also makes me feel alive.
As I was writing, I came to talk about retirement rather than answers as to whether or not I prefer to live in a retirement home.
>> As I was writing, I ended up talking about retirement rather than answering whether or not I prefer to live in a retirement home.
Please let me know next time what a retirement home is. Thanks.
>> CORRECT!
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