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2020-02-24 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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1. When I was [이름], I wanted to be a firefighter. Because I have seen the situation that they extinguish a fire. It was impressive to me. So I think fire volunteers are cool. They sacrifice a lot without reward a lot and they satisfied. If they had not sacrificed, it would have been impossible to put out wildfire in Australia. That much I respect them. 2. If I had the chance, I want to volunteer in abroad. Of course, it\'s good to volunteer in my country. But I think if I volunteer in abroad, it will give me more experience and the chance to improve. So I want to volunteer in Africa or Australia

강사 첨삭

Thank you An!

~Teacher Lucy


When I was [이름], I wanted to be a firefighter.

>>CORRECT!

 Because I have seen the situation that they extinguish a fire.

>>Because I have seen the situation where they extinguish fire.

 It was impressive to me.

>>CORRECT!
 So I think fire volunteers are cool.

>>CORRECT!

They sacrifice a lot without reward a lot and they satisfied.

>>They sacrifice a lot without rewards and they are satisfied.

If they had not sacrificed, it would have been impossible to put out wildfire in Australia.

>>CORRECT!

That much I respect them.

>>CORRECT!
 If I had the chance, I want to volunteer in abroad.

>> If I had the chance, I want to volunteer abroad.

Of course, it\'s good to volunteer in my country.

>>CORRECT!

 But I think if I volunteer in abroad, it will give me more experience and the chance to improve.

>> But I think if I volunteer abroad, it will give me more experiences and chances to improve.

So I want to volunteer in Africa or Australia

>>CORRECT!

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