Homework~!! :X
학생이 쓴 원문
1.
Nowadays, to divulge the personal information make cause many trouble.
I think it\'s possible to show as little as possible the personal information of people who are infected with the virus.
The government has to inform infected people\'s route for people.
But I think it doesn\'t need to inform the personal information trivial.
2.
I think the advantage can prevent new infected from occurring about virus.
And the disadvantage is infected\'s route makes secondary damage for self-employed.
Amenities and stores are getting closer by infected\'s route.
The place where the infected person has been to is disinfected for two weeks at least and then it will be okay.
But many people think there is the virus still there where infected people came and went.
So we need to change our perception problem.
Therefore, the government has to try to work smoothly again for self-employed.
강사 첨삭
Thank you An!
~Teacher Lucy
Nowadays, to divulge the personal information make cause many trouble.
>>CORRECT!
I think it\'s possible to show as little as possible the personal information of people who are infected with the virus.
I think it\'s possible to show as little as possible the personal information of people who are infected with the virus.
>>CORRECT!
The government has to inform infected people\'s route for people.
>>CORRECT!
But I think it doesn\'t need to inform the personal information trivial.
>>CORRECT!
I think the advantage can prevent new infected from occurring about virus.
>>CORRECT!
And the disadvantage is infected\'s route makes secondary damage for self-employed.
>>CORRECT!
Amenities and stores are getting closer by infected\'s route.
>>CORRECT!
The place where the infected person has been to is disinfected for two weeks at least and then it will be okay.
>>CORRECT!
But many people think there is the virus still there where infected people came and went.
>>But many people think the virus is still there where infected people came and went.
So we need to change our perception problem.
>>CORRECT!
Therefore, the government has to try to work smoothly again for self-employed.
>>CORRECT!
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