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Aside from sport, I\'m interested in stargazing. When I was young, once I went my dad\'s dormitory which is located deep in the mountain. We could see a lot of stars there. Once my dad told me at night. \"Just come out and look up the sky.\" When I was looking up the sky, there was such an amazing and beautiful view. I was really impressive even I was a child. After that time, I\'ve been interested in stargazing until now. Also I learned how to use the telescope to see the stars in university stargazing club. I used to stargaze with my club member, and these were one of my best experiences in my life ever. At this time, even though I\'m busy to study and no time to stargazing with telescope, sometimes I look up the sky at clear night and just gaze at stars without telescope. It makes me feel comfortable and being humble.
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Hi, [이름]^^
Thank you for sharing your answer.
It seems like those two things are the biggest part of your life these days.
_T. SHAY^^
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Aside from sport, I\'m interested in stargazing.
>>Correct
OR: Stargazing is another thing that I\'m interested in.
When I was young, once I went my dad\'s dormitory which is located deep in the mountain.
>>When I was young, I once went to my dad\'s dormitory which is located deep in the mountain.
Thank you for sharing your answer.
It seems like those two things are the biggest part of your life these days.
_T. SHAY^^
***
Aside from sport, I\'m interested in stargazing.
>>Correct
OR: Stargazing is another thing that I\'m interested in.
When I was young, once I went my dad\'s dormitory which is located deep in the mountain.
>>When I was young, I once went to my dad\'s dormitory which is located deep in the mountain.
We could see a lot of stars there.
>>Correct
OR: That place is a good place to see many stars at night.
OR: That place is a good place to see many stars at night.
Once my dad told me at night. \"Just come out and look up the sky.\"
>>Once my dad told me at night, \"Just come out and look at the sky.\'
When I was looking up the sky, there was such an amazing and beautiful view.
>>When I was looking up at the sky, there was such an amazing and beautiful view.
>>When I was looking up at the sky, there was such an amazing and beautiful view.
I was really impressive even I was a child.
>>I was really impressed even as a child.
After that time, I\'ve been interested in stargazing until now.
>>Correct
OR: I\'ve been interested in stargazing ever since then.
>>I was really impressed even as a child.
After that time, I\'ve been interested in stargazing until now.
>>Correct
OR: I\'ve been interested in stargazing ever since then.
Also I learned how to use the telescope to see the stars in university stargazing club.
>>Also, at my university stargazing club, I learned how to use a telescope to see the stars.
I used to stargaze with my club member, and these were one of my best experiences in my life ever.
>>I used to stargaze with my club member, and it\'s one of the best experiences in my life ever.
At this time, even though I\'m busy to study and no time to stargazing with telescope, sometimes I look up the sky at clear night and just gaze at stars without telescope.
>>At this time, even though I\'m busy studying and no time for stargazing with a telescope, sometimes I look up at the clear sky at night and just gaze at the stars without a telescope.
It makes me feel comfortable and being humble.
>>It makes me feel comfortable and calm.
>>Also, at my university stargazing club, I learned how to use a telescope to see the stars.
I used to stargaze with my club member, and these were one of my best experiences in my life ever.
>>I used to stargaze with my club member, and it\'s one of the best experiences in my life ever.
At this time, even though I\'m busy to study and no time to stargazing with telescope, sometimes I look up the sky at clear night and just gaze at stars without telescope.
>>At this time, even though I\'m busy studying and no time for stargazing with a telescope, sometimes I look up at the clear sky at night and just gaze at the stars without a telescope.
It makes me feel comfortable and being humble.
>>It makes me feel comfortable and calm.
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