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Hi Logan! Yes indeed, I had a great weekend! I hope you had a great weekend too! Thank you for doing your homework. I like that you have such a broad knowledge about this. I really like what you stand for. I don\'t see any problem with women entering the military. It doesnt make sense to say that females are weaker than men. We\'re all humans, and we all start out with the same amount of strength. But being in the military doesn\'t necessarily have to do with strength. It really also has to do with bravery. Anyone can be strong,if youre dedicated enough. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah

In my opinion, only women have to go to the military.

>>In my opinion, only women should be allowed to serve in the military. 

I think the military is a power.

>>I think military means power.

In Korea, many Krean men are proud of themselves and criticize Korean women.

>>In Korea, many Korean men are proud of themselves and criticize Korean women. (Correct; maybe just a typo error with \"Korean\", but please be careful ^ ^) 

They have to go to the military during one year six month.

>>They have to go to the military for one year six months. or

>>They have to serve in the military for one year and six months.

It\'s called \"the duty of national defense\".

>>Correct

So they think they sacrifice their youth.

>>So they think they sacrifice their youths. 

Our society give them some privileges like bonus in their company.

>>Our society gives them some privileges like bonuses in their company.

In Korea, women\'s emplyment rates are much lower than men.

>>In Korea, women\'s employment rates are much lower than men. (Correct; maybe just a typo error with \"employment\", but please be careful ^ ^) 

The employment rate of women and men is very different by 2:8.

>>The employment rate of women and men is by 2:8 ratio. 

I think the military has many influence about employment.

>>I think the military has a great influence when it comes to employment.

It\'s a element of a glass ceiling.

>>It\'s an element of a glass ceiling.

You know I\'m an activist of women\'s rights.

>>You know I\'m an activist for women\'s rights.

Korean men get many privileges although the military is a duty.

>>Correct or

>>Korean men get many privileges although serving in the military is a duty. 

So I think we have to take that duty someday.

>>Correct

But I think it\'s hard now.

>>Correct 

Korean mena think women army are useless because they aren\'t strong enough.

>>Korean men think that women in the army are useless because they think women aren\'t strong enough. 

So I tthink it\'s our final project.

>>So I think, it\'s our final project. (Correct; maybe just a typo error with \"think\", but please be careful ^ ^) 

>>As a proponent for women\'s rights, I think it would be nice to put it as part of our advocacies.