homework1008
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Which is better; television or books? Why?
I don't know what you mean wheter hobbies or useful source of knowledges. But in both of views, I think books are better than television. First, reading books is good for my self-improvements. Obviously, it's also a good hobby. A book is a good way to improve my knowledges and vocabulary. In television, there are much information and funny videos. But most of them aren't useful. When I wathced a TV show, I felt I'm getting a fool. Second reason is a health. It's bad for our health to watch a TV show much. Especially it's bad for our eyes, back, and etc. As I said to you, I really like watching youtube videos at dawn without lights. It cause my dry eyes. So sometimes I need some artificial tears. The point is books are better than television. So I'm going to read a book in a month!
PS. Happy Monday! I always appreciate that you correct for me.^^ Have a nice holiday!
강사 첨삭
Hi Logan! A Wonderful Wednesday to you. Thank you for your thoughts. You made a very good point on this one. ^ ^
Television is good when you want to relax, but books are far more useful, as they educate you and help you to explore your imagination. Television is good for catching up with the news and there are some good programs, but a book will teach you much more. You can improve your vocabulary, expand your imagination, and gain far more inspiration from books.
We all have our own preferences. Some would like to read more, but others would like to learn more by watching TV! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>I don\'t know what you mean whether hobbies or useful source of knowledge. (Knowledge is non countable so we don\'t put \"s\" ^ ^)
But in both of views, I think books are better than television.
>>But in both views, I think books are better than television.
First, reading books is good for my self-improvements.
>>Correct
Obviously, it\'s also a good hobby.
>>Correct
A book is a good way to improve my knowledges and vocabulary.
>>A book is a good way to improve my knowledge and vocabulary.
In television, there are much information and funny videos.
>>In television there is much information and funny videos. (Information is a non countable noun, therefore it\'s always singular.)
But most of them aren\'t useful.
>>Correct
When I wathced a TV show, I felt I\'m getting a fool.
>>When I watch a TV show, I feel that I\'m being fooled.
Second reason is a health.
>>The second reason is health.
It\'s bad for our health to watch a TV show much.
>>It\'s bad for our health to be watching TV for a long time.
Especially it\'s bad for our eyes, back, and etc.
>>Correct
As I said to you, I really like watching youtube videos at dawn without lights.
>>As I have mentioned to you, I really like watching YouTube videos at dawn without lights.
It cause my dry eyes.
>>It makes my eyes dry.
So sometimes I need some artificial tears.
>>Correct. (Your sentence is correct, but I couldn\'t quite understand what you mean with \"artificial tears\"
The point is books are better than television.
>>Correct
So I\'m going to read a book in a month!
>>Correct or
>>So, my goal is to finish one book every month.
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