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2018-10-11 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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What is stress? What are the things you do to deal with stress? I think stress is the thing I can't do anything. When I got stress from my school, I couldn't do anything like studying, dancing and talking with others. The first thing makes me mad is a team project. When I was a sophomore, I had a team project. In that team, there was a man who didn't participate in the team project. I persuaded but he didn't do anything. At that time I was so stressful. The second things are some personal connections. Sometimes when their thinking isn't similar to me, I don't know how to handle the problem with my friends. Their thinks are not same each other. Sure, we have to respect each of their thinks. But sometimes, I'm exhausted about that. I think all of the people who are in an earth are have many stresses. So we must find how to relieve our stresses. PS. I'm always thankful about your feedback. I reviewed my feedback, but my keyboards often mistype the word.^~^ See you tomorrow!

강사 첨삭

Hi Logan! Thank you for doing your homework and sharing your thoughts. I appreciate that you recognize my feedback and my corrections. ^ ^ It is really hard to handle stress. These days, they say that the leading cause of death is stress. Some people resort to drinking and over eating. Others manage it fairly well. The best advise given is that we should try to talk it out with people who are close to us. Or; better yet, do some exercise. They say yoga is also a good way to relieve stress. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah

I think stress is the thing I can\'t do anything.

>>I think stress is something that I can\'t do anything about.

When I got stress from my school, I couldn\'t do anything like studying, dancing and talking with others.

>>When I get stressed because of school, I couldn\'t do anything like studying, dancing and talking with others.

The first thing makes me mad is a team project.

>>Correct

When I was a sophomore, I had a team project.

>>Correct

In that team, there was a man who didn\'t participate in the team project.

>>Correct or

>>In that team, there was a male student who didn\'t participate in the team project.

I persuaded but he didn\'t do anything.

>>I encouraged him to participate but he didn\'t do anything.

At that time I was so stressful.

>>At that time I was so stressed.

The second things are some personal connections.

>>The second thing is when it comes to personal connections.

Sometimes when their thinking isn\'t similar to me, I don\'t know how to handle the problem with my friends.

>>Sometimes when they think differently, I don\'t know how to handle the problem with my friends.

Their thinks are not same each other.

>>We think differently.

Sure, we have to respect each of their thinks.

>>Sure, we have to respect each others\' thoughts.

But sometimes, I\'m exhausted about that.

>>But sometimes, I get exhausted by it.

I think all of the people who are in an earth are have many stresses.

>>I think, all of the people on Earth experience stress.

So we must find how to relieve our stresses.

>>So we must find a way to relieve our stresses.

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