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People who tend to be goal-oriented can know that kind of sentences.

>>People who tend to be goal-oriented know what these sentences mean.

But lazy people don’t know what they have to do.

>>But lazy people don’t know what to do.

They don’t think about all they have to do.

>>They don\'t think about the things that they have to do.

In conclusion, their life is going to be fail.

>>In conclusion, their lives would be a failure.

Our life is not decided by people excluding me.

>>Our lives are not decided by others except us.

We only know our problems, strength, weakness, preference and so on.

>>We only know for ourselves our problems, strengths, weaknesses, preferences and so on.

We only can improve our strength and some skills for our good life.

>>We are the ones who can improve our strengths and our skills in order to have a good life.

Actually, My major is not connected to the positions that I want to be.

>>Actually, my major is not related to the positions I want to apply for.

But I tried to study that field and I believe that I can be successful in this field.

>>But I\'ll try to study and focus in that field and I know that I can be successful someday.

Even though changes are going to be tiny in a short time, It will be completed if we keep trying and repeating to win a competitions by ourselves.

>>Even if there will be small chances for us, we\'ll be able to achieve more if we\'ll try our best to win the competitions in our lives.