Homework2
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
Focus on repetition again.
There were a lot of ideas restated in several sentences.
It\'s good to explore more when it comes to the expression of your thoughts.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
This phenomenon has a positive impact of people because researching family history provides a new angle on their family.
>> This phenomenon has a positive impact on people because researching one\'s family history gives them a whole new perspective on the members of the family.
It is a well-known fact that researching family history gives an opportunity to think their family objectively.
>> It is a well-known fact that researching one\'s own family history gives an opportunity to look objectively at their family.
Also, it helps people to understand their family member because they can realize new characteristics of thier family members.
>> Also, it helps people to understand the members of their family because they can realize new characteristics of each family member.
Therefore, it is clear that researching one\'s family history has a positive impact on people because they can understand their family members.
>> Correct
To sum up, peopel research the history of their own family because it helps people to identify themselves.
>> To sum up, people research the history of their own family because it helps them to identify who they are.
Also, it has a positive impact on people because it helps people to understand their family members.
>> It also has a positive impact on people because it helps people to understand the members of their family.
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