homework2018-05-23
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Writing Composition:
Describe a place you will never forget.
I never forget some place in my life as below;
First of all, It's my first overload travel that's when I was end of 20's for celebrated to my 20's generation
I went to U.S.A It's a my 'wanna be' place because my favorite american drama is 'sex and the city' there shows many kinds of place in Manhathon.
I really want to go Noyork and I realized
Second of all, I was living in Sydney for 6 months.
I worked at restaurant as a server when I get a money I go around in Sydney corner and coner. while I was living in there, I have many difference mood every days sometimes good or lonely. althogh I sent a not happy everydays but I can't forget at that times
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>>I will never forget some places and I had written it below.
First of all, It\'s my first overload travel that\'s when I was end of 20\'s for celebrated to my 20\'s generation
First of all, It\'s my first overload travel that\'s when I was end of 20\'s for celebrated to my 20\'s generation
>>First of all, my first travel was when I was 20 years old. I traveled to celebrate my 20th birthday.
I went to U.S.A It\'s a my \'wanna be\' place because my favorite american drama is \'sex and the city\' there shows many kinds of place in Manhathon.
I went to U.S.A It\'s a my \'wanna be\' place because my favorite american drama is \'sex and the city\' there shows many kinds of place in Manhathon.
>>I went to the U.S.A and it\'s one of my \'wanna be\' places because my favorite American drama is \'Sex and the City\'. They have shown many places in Manhattan.
I really want to go Noyork and I realized
>>I really want to go to New York.
Second of all, I was living in Sydney for 6 months.
I really want to go Noyork and I realized
>>I really want to go to New York.
Second of all, I was living in Sydney for 6 months.
>>Secondly, I lived in Sydney for 6 months.
I worked at restaurant as a server when I get a money I go around in Sydney corner and coner.
I worked at restaurant as a server when I get a money I go around in Sydney corner and coner.
>>I worked at a restaurant as a waiter. I earned money to go around Sydney.
while I was living in there, I have many difference mood every days sometimes good or lonely.
>>While I was living there, my mood changes every time. There are days that I feel good and there are days that I feel lonely.
althogh I sent a not happy everydays but I can\'t forget at that times
>>Although I was not happy every day, I cannot forget those times.
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