Homework3
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Q1. Is cyber-bullying (online bullying) worse than face-to-face bullying? Why or why not?
A1. I think that cyber-bullying is worse than face-to-face bullying. I\'m not saying that face-to-face bullying is better. Neither bullying should be happened.
As the use of smartphone is getting common, lots of people use it as well as teenagers.
The development of the smartphone has made people depend on it twenty-four seven. That means people can be exposed to cyber-bullying at all times.
Besides, the victim of cyber-bullying would suffer from psychological damage which is more painful than material damage and hard to be revealed to others.
When it comes to celebrities, it was because of cyber-bullying that they have depression and some of them committed suicide.
It is important to respect other people\'s right to get rid of all kind of bullying in our society.
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This is a very good answer to our homework question. ^^
Besides, the victim of cyber-bullying would suffer from psychological damage which is more painful than material damage and hard to be revealed to others.
When it comes to celebrities, it was because of cyber-bullying that they have depression and some of them committed suicide.
It is important to respect other people\'s rights to get rid of all kind of bullying in our society.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts Bo-Mi.
~t. Ally
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As the use of smartphone is getting common, lots of people use it as well as teenagers.
>> As the use of a smartphone is getting common, lots of people use it, as well as teenagers.
The development of the smartphone has made people depend on it twenty-four seven. That means people can be exposed to cyber-bullying at all times.
>> CORRECT!
Besides, the victim of cyber-bullying would suffer from psychological damage which is more painful than material damage and hard to be revealed to others.
>> The victim of cyber-bullying would suffer from psychological damage which is more painful than physical damage and it is hard to be revealed to others.
When it comes to celebrities, it was because of cyber-bullying that they have depression and some of them committed suicide.
>> CORRECT!
It is important to respect other people\'s rights to get rid of all kind of bullying in our society.
>> CORRECT!
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