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학생이 쓴 원문
I’ve never thought that men and woman have different way of getting angry. But I think depending on personality, the way of their anger is different. Some people hold back anger, or some people, when they are angry and express their anger immediately.
I am very shy and afraid of express how I feel, because I am worried about people’s feeling t[이름] mine. Even if I am in unfair situation, I usually hold back anger and try to act nothing happened. I try not to make me feel bad. Actually I just don’t have the courage to fight against unfair. Sometimes even if it’s me, I express anger. If the unfair situation is continued and it goes beyond what I can control, my anger explodes. So, people are surprised by me. I envy people who can control their feeling. Some people, if they get anger, they try to solve the problem rationally.
강사 첨삭
Your essay provides insightful reflections on how individuals [이름]dle anger based on their personalities. It\'s brave of you to acknowledge your own challenges in expressing anger and to recognize the courage needed to confront unfair situations. Your honesty further adds depth to your writing. Keep exploring and expressing your thoughts with such introspection!
~T.Harmony <3
I’ve never thought that men and woman have different way of getting angry.
I am very shy and afraid of express how I feel, because I am worried about people’s feeling t[이름] mine.
I’ve never thought that men and woman have different way of getting angry.
>> I\'ve never thought that men and women have different ways of getting angry.
OR>> It never crossed my mind that men and women...
But I think depending on personality, the way of their anger is different.
>> But I think depending on the personality, the way they get angry is different.
Some people hold back anger, or some people, when they are angry and express their anger immediately.
>> CORRECT!
I am very shy and afraid of express how I feel, because I am worried about people’s feeling t[이름] mine.
>> I am very shy and I\'m afraid of expressing how I feel because I am more worried about people\'s feelings t[이름] mine.
Even if I am in unfair situation, I usually hold back anger and try to act nothing happened.
>> Even if I am in an unfair situation, I usually hold back my anger and try to act like nothing happened.
I try not to make me feel bad.
>> CORRECT!
Actually I just don’t have the courage to fight against unfair.
>> In all honesty, I just don\'t have the courage to fight against unfair people.
Sometimes even if it’s me, I express anger.
>> CORRECT!
If the unfair situation is continued and it goes beyond what I can control, my anger explodes.
>> ......, I explode in anger.
So, people are surprised by me.
>> CORRECT!
I envy people who can control their feeling.
>> I envy people who can control their emotions.
Some people, if they get anger, they try to solve the problem rationally.
>> Some people who feel anger try to rationally solve the problem.
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