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I think that possession of drug should require jail time.

>> I think that possession of drugs should require jail time.

Drug takers are hard to stop taking drugs.

>> Drug takers or users are hard to stop from taking drugs.

Also drug takers can make the crimes.
>> Also, they can make crimes.

>> OR: In addition, they can commit crimes.

First, drug takers are hard to stop taking drugs.

>> First, drug users are difficult to stop from taking drugs.

Drug means cocain, LSD, heroin.

>> Drug means cocaine, LSD, or heroin.

They are stong helucinogen. So if people take them, Those are very hard to stop taking.

>> They are strong hallucinogens, so if people take them, they can\'t quit it easily.

Second, drug taker can make crimes.

>> Second, drug users can commit crimes.

If people start taking drugs, they can\'t live without drugs.

>> If people start taking drugs, they can\'t live without them.

So even if drug salers increase highly, they have to buy it.

>> Therefore, if drugs\' costs increases highly, they have to buy.

And their money is laking, some of them make crime like robbery.

>> In addition, if they have lack of money, some of them commit crimes like robbery.

For example, some Americans take drugs, and U.S government used hardline policy to drug.

>> For example, some Americans take drugs, and the US government uses hardline policies to drugs.

So buying drugs are hard todrug takers, and some underground organizations sell drugs to them.

>> Therefore, buying drugs are difficult for users to do, and underground organizations sell them the narcotics they want.

Then, cost of drug is increase like a roket, drug takers do robbery.

>> Then, the cost of drugs increases like a rocket, so some drug users commit robbery.