homework8
학생이 쓴 원문
I really love shopping, actually I prefer to shop online.
However, disadvantage of the online shopping is that I can’t try on what I want to buy. So, I go to offline shopping to put on the clothes and find the right size for me.
I like to shop the department store and pop-up store. Each of the place has merit, the department store is cool int the summer and warm in the winter so it is appropriate at any time. Also, most brands are available. On the other side, pop-up store is temporary so it has lots of unique item and it is chance to get a discount.
And after all of the offline shop is end, I come back to home and order that I liked. I usually love to buy cute short sleeveless with lovely printing.
Next weekend, I’m planning to go to pop-up store at Hongdae, so I’m really looking forward to it. Shopping makes me refresh!
강사 첨삭
Hello, Jenny!
You fixed some of your sentences and included some grammatically correct sentences discussed in class.
In talking about the shopping platform, discuss it briefly and talk about the things that you buy so that you can bolster your point of buying them in the department store rather than online.
Nonetheless, your organization is systematic, your transitions are very appropriate, and your details are complete. Overall, you mastered the process of answering OPIc speaking tests.
Learn more exquisite vocabulary words and use them in speech.
See you tomorrow.
-T. Donna~
>>> Correct!
However, disadvantage of the online shopping is that I can’t try on what I want to buy. So, I go to offline shopping to put on the clothes and find the right size for me.
However, disadvantage of the online shopping is that I can’t try on what I want to buy. So, I go to offline shopping to put on the clothes and find the right size for me.
>>> However, the disadvantage of the online shopping is that I can’t try on what I want to buy. So, I go to offline shopping to put on the clothes and find the right size for me.
I like to shop the department store and pop-up store. Each of the place has merit, the department store is cool int the summer and warm in the winter so it is appropriate at any time. Also, most brands are available. On the other side, pop-up store is temporary so it has lots of unique item and it is chance to get a discount.
I like to shop the department store and pop-up store. Each of the place has merit, the department store is cool int the summer and warm in the winter so it is appropriate at any time. Also, most brands are available. On the other side, pop-up store is temporary so it has lots of unique item and it is chance to get a discount.
>>> I like to shop in the department store and pop-up stores. Each of the places has merits, the department store is cool in the summer and warm in the winter so it is appropriate at any time. Also, most brands are available. On the other side, the pop-up store is temporary so it has lots of unique items and it has chances to get discounts.
And after all of the offline shop is end, I come back to home and order that I liked. I usually love to buy cute short sleeveless with lovely printing.
And after all of the offline shop is end, I come back to home and order that I liked. I usually love to buy cute short sleeveless with lovely printing.
>>> After shopping, I come back home and order what I like. I usually love to buy cute short sleeveless shirts with lovely printing/ prints.
Next weekend, I’m planning to go to pop-up store at Hongdae, so I’m really looking forward to it. Shopping makes me refresh!
Next weekend, I’m planning to go to pop-up store at Hongdae, so I’m really looking forward to it. Shopping makes me refresh!
>>> Next weekend, I’m planning to go to a pop-up store at Hongdae, so I’m really looking forward to it. Shopping makes me refreshed!
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