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2019-05-23 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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I can\'t forget in high school graduation. Because it is first day I was drank in my life. After I graduated in primary school and middle school I always played soccer pratice because my dream. And after i graduated in high school i had gone to work for make money and then I graduated in college I started coaching.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!


Thank you for sharing about your graduation experiences. Enjoy the rest of the day. :)


sincerely,

Teacher Lucy


I can\'t forget in high school graduation.

>>I can\'t forget my high school graduation.


Because it is first day I was drank in my life.

>>Because it is the first day I was drank in my life.

After I graduated in primary school and middle school I always played soccer pratice because my dream.

>>After I graduated in primary school and middle school I always played and practiced soccer because it\'s my dream.


And after i graduated in high school i had gone to work for make money and then I graduated in college I started coaching.

>>And after I graduated in high school I had gone to work to make money and then, when I graduated in college I started coaching.

>>And after I graduated in high school I had gone to work for money and when I graduated in college I started coaching.

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