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2019-09-06 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

-Is it a good idea for a father to raise his children full-time? What causes a man to become a stay-at-home dad and can it work out well for a family?- (^-^) I think that It does not matter who raise the children. If a father cares and does better than a mother to raise their children, father can become a stay-at home dad. The best chef is man and people who manufecture home appliances are also men. I really agree with that a father raises his children like a house wife as long as a father can do better than a mother. As I know, boys need father\'s strength and girls need mother\'s deliicacy. It always causes same matters as long as one of parents raise their children. I hope that a father and a mother help each other to raise their children.

강사 첨삭

Very well said [이름]! ^ ^ I totally agree with you. Raising children is a shared responsibility. It doesn\'t matter who as long as they do their best to raise good and responsible children! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah 

I think that It does not matter who raise the children.
>>I think that it does not matter who raises the children.
If a father cares and does better than a mother to raise their children, father can become a stay-at home dad.
>>CORRECT
The best chef is man and people who manufecture home appliances are also men.
>>The best chef are men and people who manufacture home appliances are also men.
I really agree with that a father raises his children like a house wife as long as a father can do better than a mother.
>>CORRECT
As I know, boys need father\'s strength and girls need mother\'s deliicacy.
>>As I know, boys need father\'s strength and girls need mother\'s delicateness.
It always causes same matters as long as one of parents raise their children.
>>CORRECT
I hope that a father and a mother help each other to raise their children.
>>CORRECT

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