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The age of retirement has a statutory age.
>>CORRECT!
>>The government came to conclusion for the exact retirement age.
But I think I should quit when I\'m not interested in the job.
>>CORRECT!
>>When I\'m not interested in the job, I should quit.
It is time for young people to have many dreams.
>>CORRECT!
>>It\'s time for the younger generation to have lots of dreams.
Therefore, I think they should challenge themselves when there is something they want to do.
>>CORRECT!
>>Nonetheless, they should face every challenges bravely.
However, they have to work hard because they have to take responsibility for the results.
>>CORRECT!
>>Moreover, they have to endure every challenges which will help them to be strong taking responsibilities in the future.
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