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Hello there!

I am happy to read your view about immigration.

Thank you for sharing it.

I commend you for supplying details to support your opinion. Keep it up!

Anyway, please go over the corrections I made in your sentences.

Have a good day!

~T. Jessie~

HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: If you had to immigrate to another country, where would you go? Why?
I naver thought about an immigration siriously, and actually I don\'t want to emigrate to another country.

>> I never thought about immigrating seriously, and actually I don\'t want to immigrate to another country.

Some of Korean dream that becuase education, job opportunity and other outlooks of life.

>> Some Koreans dream of that because of education, job opportunity and other outlooks in life.

I completely understand their situations.

Although the nationality is decided from one\'s birth, people can choose and change their own nationality today.

>> Correct!

Recently, Korea records the most highest sucide rate in OECD.

>> Recently, Korea records the highest suicide rate in OECD.

Especially, the rate was particularly high among senior people.

>> The rate is especially high among senior people.

OR>> The rate is particularly high among senior people.

Korea achieved very impressive and rapid economy deveplopment, however the quility of life is still not satisfactory.

>> Korea achieved very impressive and rapid economic development, however the quality of life is still not satisfactory.

Excessive competition, the gab between the rich and poor and high retirement rate make Korean\'s life harshly.

>> Excessive competition, the gap between the rich and the poor and high retirement rate make Koreans\' lives harsh.

Goverment should provide better walfare, health care and grant to reduce the gap between rich and poor.

>>  The government should provide better welfare, health care and grant to reduce the gap between rich and poor.

I agree that Korean\'s life aren\'t easy, but personally I want to alter it better in Korea.

>> I agree that Koreans\' lives aren\'t easy, but personally I want to alter it for the better in Korea.

OR>> I agree that Koreans\' lives aren\'t easy, but personally I want to make it better in Korea.