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Generally speaking, the construciton field has more accidents and deaths than other fields.
To reduce theses accidents, we are focusing on developing safety technologies. For example, using equipment without people and alarms which alert workers during dangerous work. Because of development of these technologies, many construction accidents have decreased.
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Good afternoon, Ho [이름]!
I agree that the construction field has a higher risk of accidents compared to many other industries. Using automated facilities and systems sounds like an effective way to protect workers, especially in dangerous situations. However, I think technology alone may not be enough. Having Proper training, strict safety regulations, and strong supervision are also important to further reduce accidents. Thank you for sharing your thoughts!
Aki~
Generally speaking, the construction field has more accidents and deaths than other fields.
>>> CORRECT!
To reduce theses accidents, we are focusing on developing safety technologies.
>>> To reduce these accidents, we are focusing on developing safety technologies.
For example, using equipment without people and alarms which alert workers during dangerous work.
>>>> For example, using equipment without people and alarms that alert workers during dangerous work.
Because of development of these technologies, many construction accidents have decreased.
>>> Because of the development of these technologies, many construction accidents have decreased.
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