House

2012-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 Karen

학생이 쓴 원문

I think my house is big enough to live four of our family. I like big house because we can play hide and seek with my brother. And i always dreamt of having a big farm as a garden because it seems interesting and i can ride a house everyday for free! Also i want to plant a lot of flowers. Our family likes to decorate house so if we have a very big house than i want tp decorate my room like a pretty teenager room. And I hope I can have a pool to swim so it will be cool in hot summer.

강사 첨삭

Hello! Thanks again for and making a composition. (^__^)  (^^,) Keep studying, I know you can do it! (^_^) I will be cheering for you. If you become successful, you can buy your own big house.  If you have any question, just please ask me, I will be very happy to help you out. Aja! Fighting! Good night and check on your pasta and your pizza haha. (^_______^)

~Karen (-^o^-)

I think my house is big enough to live four of our family.

>> I think my house is big enough for our family of four.

I like big house because we can play hide and seek with my brother.

>> I like having a big house because I can play hide and seek with my brother.

And i always dreamt of having a big farm as a garden because it seems interesting and i can ride a house everyday for free!

>> Don't forget to capitalize the word 'I'.

>> I also dreamt of having a big farm as a garden because it seems interesting, plus I can ride going to our house for free.

Also i want to plant a lot of flowers.

>> Don't forget to capitalize the word 'I'.

>> Also, I want to plant a lot of flowers.

Our family likes to decorate house so if we have a very big house than i want tp decorate my room like a pretty teenager room.

>> Don't forget your comma [ , ] as well, to clearly divide the thoughts in your sentence.

>> Our family likes to decorate our house, so if we have a very big house, then I want to decorate my room like that of a pretty teenager's room.

 And I hope I can have a pool to swim so it will be cool in hot summer.

>> And I hope that I can have a pool to swim in  so it will be cool in the hot summer.

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