How about extra-curricular activities..
학생이 쓴 원문
I have been studying English over a year in the British council. It has been a big change for the better in my life. The great thing is that I enjoy the things which is not easy for my aged people. And I can have a chance to meet people from all levels of society through that activity. In addition, it would be one of the best way to relieve from my stress. While I was concentrated on my study,I was able to forget all my nuisance. I just enjoy it self, even though there were some difficulties with me. From time to time, I would go frustrated though, I do really feel that I could make some advance. This academic activities helps me to find myself(or identify?) even though I spend half of the day to study English. I'm satisfying who I am today. At my age, challenging something new, how attractive it is !!
강사 첨삭
Good morning Ms. [Name]! =) I am truly happy to read about the sentence towards the last that you said even though you are frustrated from time to time, you feel that you could do some advcance. I am sure about this, ofcourse, and through time I know you would not only make some, but you would make great improvement! Carry on with that diligence! By the way you study English more than half a day, kk. =) See you, take care! =)
~~ T. Ali =)
I have been studying English over a year in the British council.
>>> Correct
It has been a big change for the better in my life.
>>> Correct
The great thing is that I enjoy the things which is not easy for my aged people.
>>> The great thing is that I enjoy the things which is not easy for my aged years.
And I can have a chance to meet people from all levels of society through that activity.
>>> Correct
In addition, it would be one of the best way to relieve from my stress.
>>> In addition, it would be one of the best ways to relieve my stress.
While I was concentrated on my study,I was able to forget all my nuisance.
>>> While I was concentrating on my studies, I was able to forget all my nuisance.
I just enjoy it self, even though there were some difficulties with me.
>>> Correct
From time to time, I would go frustrated though, I do really feel that I could make some advance.
>>> Correct
This academic activities helps me to find myself(or identify?) even though I spend half of the day to study English.
>>> Correct
I\'m satisfying who I am today. At my age, challenging something new, how attractive it is !!
>>> Correct
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