How are businesses today different from businesses in the past?

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The world is developing rapidly so, we are adapting the speed of change.

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>>We are adapting the speed of change because the world is developing.

 For example, smartphones are commercialized before almost 15 years ago.

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>>As an example, smartphones were innovated 15 years ago.

But now, we can watch fordable phones.

>>But now, we can watch in foldable phones.

It was just an imagination before but, we finally actualized that.

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>>We finally created it though it was an abstract before.

 Thus, I think difference of business in the past and today is development of media.

>> Thus, I think the difference of business in the past and today is development of media.

Development of media had a big influence on the business.

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 First, the customers can use many medias.

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>>Apparently, costumers can use social networking sites.

So they can contact many information by themselves and choose the information which they want.

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Thus, companies should compete more than before.

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 Second, it is occurred many businesses using a media.

>>Second, it is occurred that many businesses using the media.

For example, many youtube channels make a prohibit and many apps on smartphone like Yogiyo rise as new business model.

>>For example, many YouTube channels prohibit and many apps on smartphone like Yogiyo rise as new business model.

 So, I think development of media affect on the business today.

>>So, I think the development of media affects the businesses today.

 Thus, we should adapt and develop as the trend for success of the business.

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